Poor English edits, removed condescension

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diff --git a/.md/tutorials/www/how-to-use-the-internet.md b/.md/tutorials/www/how-to-use-the-internet.md
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--- a/.md/tutorials/www/how-to-use-the-internet.md
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@@ -3,28 +3,38 @@
 Why *would* anyone want to use the Internet,
 really?
 
+There is actually purpose to connecting all the
+computers in the world with near-instant speed
+beyond just streaming television, phishing scams,
+pornography, punditry, and Fortnight competitions.
+
 Unfortunately, almost none of us use the Internet
 for it's intended purpose: finding infomation.
 
-Writing to someone or posting a picture of
-your cat seems to be second nature for most
-people, but converting a picture from a PDF or
-looking up a study (or even a word!) you saw
-in an article is something else entirely.
+Writing an angry tweet to a celebrity or
+posting a picture of your cat seems to be
+second nature for most people, but converting
+a picture from a PDF or looking up a study
+(or even a word!) you saw in an article is
+something else entirely.
 
 While that's in part the fault of our laziness,
 it's equally the fault of what the Internet has
-become. For one, there's just so much more *stuff*
+become.
+
+For one: there's just so much more *stuff*
 now; it's hard to know exactly where to start and
 who to trust. And so much of that stuff is now
-*garbage*, either in the way it's presented--with
-disruptive ads that don't close correctly--or in
-the way it's written--vague, misleading, or
-straight incorrect. But for seconds: no one really
-teaches you how to use this thing do they? There
-are no courses on "How to use a search engine" or
-"How to find good posts on a forum," yet these are
-the kinds of skills you really need if you want to
+*garbage*, either in the way it's presented, with
+disruptive ads that don't close correctly, or in
+the way it's written: vague, misleading, or straight
+incorrect.
+
+For two: no one really teaches you how to use this
+thing do they? There are no courses on "How to use a search engine"
+or "How to find good posts on a forum," and definitely not on
+"How to *write* good posts on a forum." But these are
+exactly the kinds of skills you really need if you want to
 navigate the modern world without getting
 constantly distracted, misled, or totally lost.
 
@@ -49,15 +59,16 @@ what services are available.
 
 As for which search engine to use: you should use
 all of them, until you get the results you need.
+
 In my experience, none of the major search engines
 are particularly good and I get inconsistent
 searches on all of them depending on what I'm
-searching. There is much preaching these days
-about privacy concerns, but to be honest I don't
+searching. There is a lot of preaching these days
+about privacy concerns, but I don't really
 believe any service is more "private" than
-another. These are all privacy nightmares, your
-best bet is to just search often and as varied as
-you can.
+another. These are all privacy nightmares,
+arguably by design. Your best bet is just to
+search often and as many platforms as you can.
 
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