Poor English edits, removed condescension

2 files changed, 31 insertions, 20 deletions

diff --git a/.md/tutorials/www/how-to-make-this-site.md b/.md/tutorials/www/how-to-make-this-site.md
index d62e47c..0a2d201 100644
--- a/.md/tutorials/www/how-to-make-this-site.md
+++ b/.md/tutorials/www/how-to-make-this-site.md
@@ -125,7 +125,7 @@ server {
 For now, you don't need to change anything, so don't worry about what it
 means.
 
-But do note the directory set on "root." This is where the web server
+But note the directory set on "root." This is where the web server
 looks for files and folders. You can change this, but usually, you don't
 need too. Any files or folders you put under "/var/www/html" will be
 included as part of the web server when viewed in a web browser.
diff --git a/.md/tutorials/www/how-to-use-the-internet.md b/.md/tutorials/www/how-to-use-the-internet.md
index f5b98a3..fd9b0e8 100644
--- a/.md/tutorials/www/how-to-use-the-internet.md
+++ b/.md/tutorials/www/how-to-use-the-internet.md
@@ -3,28 +3,38 @@
 Why *would* anyone want to use the Internet,
 really?
 
+There is actually purpose to connecting all the
+computers in the world with near-instant speed
+beyond just streaming television, phishing scams,
+pornography, punditry, and Fortnight competitions.
+
 Unfortunately, almost none of us use the Internet
 for it's intended purpose: finding infomation.
 
-Writing to someone or posting a picture of
-your cat seems to be second nature for most
-people, but converting a picture from a PDF or
-looking up a study (or even a word!) you saw
-in an article is something else entirely.
+Writing an angry tweet to a celebrity or
+posting a picture of your cat seems to be
+second nature for most people, but converting
+a picture from a PDF or looking up a study
+(or even a word!) you saw in an article is
+something else entirely.
 
 While that's in part the fault of our laziness,
 it's equally the fault of what the Internet has
-become. For one, there's just so much more *stuff*
+become.
+
+For one: there's just so much more *stuff*
 now; it's hard to know exactly where to start and
 who to trust. And so much of that stuff is now
-*garbage*, either in the way it's presented--with
-disruptive ads that don't close correctly--or in
-the way it's written--vague, misleading, or
-straight incorrect. But for seconds: no one really
-teaches you how to use this thing do they? There
-are no courses on "How to use a search engine" or
-"How to find good posts on a forum," yet these are
-the kinds of skills you really need if you want to
+*garbage*, either in the way it's presented, with
+disruptive ads that don't close correctly, or in
+the way it's written: vague, misleading, or straight
+incorrect.
+
+For two: no one really teaches you how to use this
+thing do they? There are no courses on "How to use a search engine"
+or "How to find good posts on a forum," and definitely not on
+"How to *write* good posts on a forum." But these are
+exactly the kinds of skills you really need if you want to
 navigate the modern world without getting
 constantly distracted, misled, or totally lost.
 
@@ -49,15 +59,16 @@ what services are available.
 
 As for which search engine to use: you should use
 all of them, until you get the results you need.
+
 In my experience, none of the major search engines
 are particularly good and I get inconsistent
 searches on all of them depending on what I'm
-searching. There is much preaching these days
-about privacy concerns, but to be honest I don't
+searching. There is a lot of preaching these days
+about privacy concerns, but I don't really
 believe any service is more "private" than
-another. These are all privacy nightmares, your
-best bet is to just search often and as varied as
-you can.
+another. These are all privacy nightmares,
+arguably by design. Your best bet is just to
+search often and as many platforms as you can.
 
 ## How to read and find scholarly articles