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@@ -176,8 +176,8 @@ full of pages.</p>
 <p>The way you get here is through a device you have at home called a
 router, which literally does what the name implies--it routes signals to
 where they need to go to make things go beep. In the 60s and 70s,
-routers tended to be people-based and would spend their time plugging
-cables into and out of ports so calls could connect.</p>
+routers tended to be people-based and would require workers spend their
+time plugging cables into and out of ports so calls could connect.</p>
 <p><img src="/static/human_router.jpg"/></p>
 <p><em>Image of a switchboard courtesy of <a href="https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/File:Jersey_Telecom_switchboard_and_operator.jpg">Wikipedia
 contributors</a></em></p>
@@ -185,18 +185,18 @@ contributors</a></em></p>
 for us. Internet companies, governments, and anyone else with enough
 money and influence bought huge routers and hooked them all up to talk
 to each other. Then they convinced us all to go out and buy a router
-from our ISP of "choice" so we could all send cat pictures to each other
+from our ISP of choice so we could all send cat pictures to each other
 seamlessly. We got rid of phones, replaced our phone with our IP address
 and email, just to ironically end up back at phones again. All of our
-devices serve, or at least can serve, as a router in some way, and all
+devices serve, or at least can serve, as a router in some way. And all
 these little robots talking to each other makes it so you can get lost
 on some person's home page.</p>
 <p>In a way, you could say you've made it to a place my router took you
-to. Not my home router of course--that one sucks.</p>
-<p>I'm mooching of someone else's, also known as a Virtual Private
-Server. These companies run whole bunch of servers, hook them up on a
-bulk connection and rent them out for people to run blogs about cats and
-porn sites.</p>
+to. But not my home router of course--that one sucks.</p>
+<p>I'm mooching off someone else's, also known as a Virtual Private
+Server. These companies run a whole bunch of servers, hook them up on a
+bulk connection and rent them out for people to run fake media
+companies, blogs about cats, and porn sites.</p>
 <p>I'm getting lost on your question though, so where are we
 exactly?</p>
 <p>Precisely speaking, you are in a chrooted web server running on
@@ -208,29 +208,32 @@ since local ISPs tend to be ridiculously expensive if you want to do
 anything besides host some private servers for you and your friends and
 family.</p>
 <p>But maybe most importantly, you've reached a webpage owned by another
-human being, not a corporation, or a bot, or a government, or work, or a
-<em>network</em>. All these files were loving crafted by yours truly in
-vim, in markdown and converted with pandoc to HTML because of laziness.
-The Internet I grew up with, though I didn't really appreciate it at the
-time, used to be filled with places like this. "Homepages" were a thing,
-or were just starting to be at least.</p>
+human being. Well mostly... I don't own the hardware. But the place is
+mine; not a corporation's, or a bot's, or a government's. All these
+files were loving crafted by yours truly in markdown, using vim, and
+converted with pandoc to HTML because of laziness.</p>
+<p>The Internet I grew up with, though I didn't really appreciate it at
+the time, used to be filled with places like this. "Homepages" were a
+thing, or were just starting to be at least.</p>
 <p>But as soon as it started it all got sucked up and commodified into
 social media; we somehow got coerced into profiles, templates, and
-standards to make us easier for ad companies to study. It's not even
-unreasonable to believe you're not even talking to real people on there,
-because there's a good chance of it now. <a href="https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Astroturfing">Astroturfing</a> is
+standards to make us easier for ad companies to study. And even I really
+liked it for a while, but over time, it got fake. I got fake.</p>
+<p>And speaking of fake, it's not even unreasonable to believe you're
+not even talking to real people on there, because there's a good chance
+of it now. <a href="https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Astroturfing">Astroturfing</a> is
 not a secret government conspiracy, it's just business as usual at this
 point. You used to be able to tell a human from a chatbot from the way
 they write. I don't know if the bots at this point are smarter, or if
 we've just been made so cynical and dumb by the process that we've given
 up.</p>
-<p>Who would really write all that garbage on Facebook anyway?</p>
+<p>In a way it's a reassuring: would real people really write all that
+garbage on Facebook anyway?</p>
 <p>Don't mistake this for some pity nostalgia piece though. If you look
 hard enough--I promise you--that <em>Internet</em> of humans is still
 there. Here's a few places I like to poke around:</p>
 <p>https://neocities.org/</p>
 <p>https://1mb.club/</p>
-<p>https://goodsites.tech/</p>
 <p>and old <a href="https://archive.md/rav1z">not-so</a> faithful:</p>
 <p>https://www.wikipedia.org/</p>
 <p>A helpful tip, CRTL+W will close any webpage you don't like. Not that